The present

Hi and welcome back to my blog. for the past weeks of school we have been writing about the present for writing. I hope you enjoy my story about the present. The Present

W.A.L.T:  Write a narrative

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….

• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.
• Seeks feedback and makes changes to texts to improve clarity and meaning.

The present

I was playing video games then mum made a bang and scared me. But then gave me a present I was looking at it I was thinking of what it could be Xbox 1, play station I don't know what it could be. I open the box something jumps out with excitement "cool a puppy". I look at the puppy and I see it only has three legs I was like get lost. I throw the puppy away I was trying to play my video games the puppy hit his head on the cabinet I laughed. Then he grabbed the ball I looked at the puppy and saw it was really clumsy and being silly. Trying to get a red ball and he gave the ball to me. I just kick it away it got into the box. The puppy got trapped in the box and lost the ball. Pup found the ball and started to eat it and chew it.  I said “Mum, we're going outside”.
The end