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My bad day ( first draft)

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

                    

First draft.

My bad day.

One summer day I was walking with my family by the african savannah river.  Then we stopped peeked around the corner then started to walk again. Then we stopped again then I saw moving grass then we realized they were lions. Then we started to run as fast as we can then I got tackled by the lions and we pushed each other into the river and the lions started to try eat me but an crocodile came along and the crocodile grabbed me. 

Then we stopped peeked around the corner then the herd started to walk again. Then we stopped again. Then we saw lions. Then we started to run as fast as we can and I feel terrified because i feel like the lions are getting closer and closer then bam I got attack by the herd of lions it feeled like I can burst out with bloud. Then I got tackled by the lions and we pushed each other into the river and the lions started to try eat me but a crocodile came along and the crocodile grab me. It feels like they were playing tug of war but used me as a rope. But the crocodile left and I esgate the lions and i'm am so glad that I esgate the lions and I feel please that i'm back with my family so my dad attack the lion and the lion ran as fast as they can to get away from my herd.

I’m am so glad that I’m with my family to have fun.